After viewing the blog post from 2/23, I looked back on what I said I was going to work on in my paper. I knew I wanted to continue to build on word choice and emphasis there, as well as good focus through out the paper. I feel like I need stronger evidence and analysis in this paper like I had in the first paper, this is definitely something to work on. I also improved in my transitions from my last paper, and they can still improve further. I do plan on constructing a much better conclusion, which was an obvious weakness in my last player. Overall, I feel like I am in a good place after the rough draft and I can certainly improve the essay in many ways, while still showing the strengths I had in the first paper.
